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Poetry Inspired By Mentor Poets- Structure & Patterns

In my eternal quest for poetry mentor texts that will support the sometimes tentative writing efforts of emerging student poets (and their teachers), I came across this poem by John Rice. It was part of a collection ‘Poems to Perform: A Classic Collection Chosen by the Children's Laureate,’Julia Donaldson.


The poem has a simple repetitive structure that provides a safe scaffold for the less experience poet. Students immediately note the please do -please do not pattern and the way the poet finishes with a line that breaks the pattern, yet neatly ties the poet’s thoughts together. It’s as if he has an afterthought. They also noted the element of humour the poet had injected into the poem. For young poets, the presence of humour heightens engagement.



Instructions For Giants


Please do not step on swings parks, youth

clubs, cinemas and discos

Please flatten all schools

Please do not eat children, pop stars, TV

soap operas, kind grannies who give us 

50cents

Please feel free to gobble up dentists

Please do not block out the sunshine

Please push all rain over to France

Please do not drink the public swimming
pool

Please eat all cabbage fields, vegetable plots and anything green that grows in the countryside!

Please do not trample kittens, lambs or other baby animals

Please take spiders and snakes, ants and beetles home for your own pets

Please stand clear of the jets passing
Please sew up the ozone layer

Please mind where you put your BIG feet

And no sneaking off to China when you’re playing hide and seek.

John Rice

 

The next step was to show students (in this case, Grade 4 students) how one can improvise upon the structure of the original poem. I decided to write my poem focusing on instructions I would give to a crocodile.  I certainly borrowed from the original structure but also added a few of my own moves.


Instructions For Crocodiles

Please stay out of the swimming pool

Please don’t get snappy when things don’t

go your way

Please close your mouth when eating

Please consider becoming a vegetarian

Please stay away from my backyard

Only go after nasty folk

Please consider becoming a handbag

Please clean your teeth, swamp breath

And don’t be so thick-skinned about things

I have never, ever smiled at you

Seriously… 
                                                         
Alan j Wright

 

When I presented the two poems I invited a comparison. I invited students to look for similarities and differences. At this point I talked about writing in the style of a trusted author, or writing under the influence of a fellow writer. We used our poet’s eyes to note the craft moves being made within the poem.


As part of the critical pre-writing phase of a lesson, I challenged students to brainstorm a list of possible subjects to whom instructions could be given. They came up with monsters, aliens (quite predictable) parents, teachers, siblings (their word) pets (quite an array) and prime ministers.


Each young poet then made a decision regarding the focus for ‘instructions.’ Following this, I had them rehearse their words with a partner. I wanted them to hear the words before they wrote. I then released them to write. They set about the writing with enthusiasm and delight. I noticed how several of these young poets were smiling as they wrote. It appeared they were entertained by their own thoughts as they composed their pieces. At the conclusion of the workshop the eagerness to share was also most notable. Their raw words were a delight. I suggested that they revisit their poems the next day to view them with fresh eyes and ears. I encouraged them to continue to polish their words and work towards publishing and sharing their poems with a wider audience. My young audience was nodding in agreement.



Rereading the raw words of  our first drafts to hear them as a reader would hear them. This provides a perfect opportunity to begin polishing our poetic pearls.

To conclude, I have attached Tenaya’s poem. She informed me that she wanted to write her instructions from the perspective of a boy with a younger sister. Her poem has captured  the structure of John Rice’s poem as well as  capturing the mindset of the aggrieved older brother.


Instructions For Little Sisters


Note To All Little Sisters! 


Please do not torture me with your little pink frilly dresses

Please don’t make me sit down and drink fake tea and talk to stuffed animals on a plastic table and chairs in your room

Please colour in your own colouring book, not

mine

Please don’t sing to me, you make my ears bleed

Please dress the dog up as a prince, instead of me

Please don’t scream at me

Please don’t show me your castle pictures

Please watch Ben 10 instead of The Little Princess

Please don’t kill my pet worms

Please don’t step on ants

And don’t cry in front of me

Tenaya. F.

                        

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