Dodoitsu:
The Dodoitsu, is a Japanese poetic form that doesn't have meter or rhyme constraints but they do have syllable constraints (like many Japanese forms).
This 4-line poem has seven syllables in the first three lines and five syllables in the fourth--and final--line.
The Dodoitsu often focuses on love or work with a comical twist.
Here are three Dodoitsu I recently made...
Flower Power Blackout
I brought my love some flowers
To raise her spirits higher
However, two hours later
They're still in the sink.
Alan j Wright
Coaxing Forth Poems
Unwritten poems hide away
Deep inside my pen of choice
I tell them it's safe out here
And switch on the light.
Alan j Wright
Clowning About
The clown tried to bring forth fun
The children didn't buy in
But when the clown cried loudly
They burst out laughing.
Alan j Wright
It's Poetry Friday and this week our kindly host is Mary Lee Hahn at Another year Of Reading. Mary Lee is writing poetry prompted by 'percentages.' Check out her poem and more...
Thank you for introducing me to this new form! Now to find out how to pronounce it!!
ReplyDeleteMy pleasure, Leigh Anne. Do-doit-su should do it
DeleteAwww... poor clown! And I know that flower story well. :) Thank you! This form is new to me. :)
ReplyDeleteYou're welcome Irene. Pleased to make the introduction.
DeleteWhat an excellent form for a dry wit. I love how that last line falls flat. (You've tempted me to cat-ch a moment from last night, in rough-draft poetry.)
ReplyDeleteA cool evening wander.
Pattering steps behind us.
Pulse races. Could be dingoes!
But it's just our cat.
Wow, Kat -you jumped straight in! Well done you!
DeleteThose poor, unwritten poems! This form works well with humor. Thanks for sharing this!
ReplyDeleteYou're right about the form facilitating a touch of humour and whimsy, Janice. Think that's part of its appeal for me.
DeleteYour last lines are zingers. Especially in "Clowning About."
ReplyDeleteThe thought of those last lines being zingers pleases me immensely, Mary Lee.
Delete"Switch on the light" seems as if you just did, Alan. A favorite pen and a form you want to try - inspiration! Because we just passed Halloween, that "Clowning About" reminds of the fun this year & the sadness of the last one.. #mixedemotions
ReplyDeleteYou are making multiple connections, Linda- always a pleasing sign for any poet.
DeleteI do love me a good twist at the end, Alan, and all three of your dodoitsus didn't disappoint. :)
ReplyDeleteLove your alliterative sign-off Bridget. Glad you like the timely twists...
DeleteYou know what?! I love popping over to your blog for poem ideas. I find new-to-me forms and fun ways to write them. This week is a perfect example of that. Your poems are fun for the wry punchline, so to speak, at the end. Totally my cuppa tea. Can't wait to get writing my own. Thanks, again!
ReplyDeleteWell, thank you very much Linda. You've brightened my day with that comment. Look forward to seeing what transpires for you as a result of the Dodoitsu dowsing. Wry punchlines and all...
DeleteAlan, thanks again for sharing a sweet poetry form, and your great examples. I think "Flower Power Blackout" is a great example of writing about love with a comical twist. I smiled seeing the flowers in the sink!
ReplyDeleteMy pleasure Denise. Glad you found something in my words. Love and laughter intertwined...
DeleteThese are delightful Alan! I love your comic twists at the end of the first and last poems, and the second one captures the experience of writing poetry perfectly, as we bid the words to find their way onto our pages.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Elisabeth. Glad you enjoyed the twists. You have captured my intent in your response.
DeleteI really like these! Thank you!
ReplyDeleteMy pleasure Ruth. So glad your reading of these poems was pleasurable.
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