The Dodoitsu, is a Japanese poetic form that doesn't have meter or rhyme constraints but they do have syllable constraints (like many Japanese forms).
This 4-line poem has seven syllables in the first three lines and five syllables in the fourth--and final--line.
The Dodoitsu often focuses on love or work with a comical twist. I have featured these poems previously, but I found them seeking more time in the limelight...
I am standing at the corner
Watching the traffic stream by
Willing the red light to change
-Any green will do.
Willing the red light to change
-Any green will do.
Alan j Wright
Love is a like a red red rose
Tangled like a garden hose
Flowers help to smooth the rough
-But diamonds sparkle.
Tangled like a garden hose
Flowers help to smooth the rough
-But diamonds sparkle.
Alan j Wright
It is Poetry Friday and our host this time is Tanita S Davis at 'Fiction Instead Of Lies' . Tanita shares news about a July writing challenge involving 'Sedoka' a short form of poetry that follows syllabic rules.
Wonderful! Just one word in each poem adds the dash of humor--which makes these shine. "Any" and "hose." A gentle touch---but so much meaning. Bravo!
ReplyDeleteWith short forms of poetry, words carry extra weight. Thank you for yet another valued observation, Linda.
DeleteHAH, any green will do, indeed. I think I have lived that first poem more often than not. I also appreciate the idea of love, 'tangled like a garden hose.' That's offbeat and lovely! Thanks for coming out to play on Poetry Friday!
ReplyDeletePlay, indeed. Such good fun for a poet. Both playful and precise. Thanks Tanita. I tried numerous times to respond to your post, but alas, I was continually rebuked by the machine. Just to let you know I enjoyed the sedoka, a poetry form I am unfamiliar with, but intend to spend some time with in the coming week. Thanks for the introduction.
DeleteThese are fun Alan, I really like your "Tangled like a garden hose" in the love poem, and the sparkling diamond at the end! Wishing you many green lights, thanks!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Michelle. And thank you for your green light message.
DeleteAlan, you are such a resource for poetic forms. Thank you -- "Any green will do " --has made me smile tonight.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Patricia. I do enjoy freely roaming the poetic terrain in search of treasures to share with others. Keep smiling...
DeleteMission accomplished -- the twist at the end of these poems made me smile! I hope you'll join us next month for another count-the-syllables challenge!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Mary Lee. Syllable challenge sounds inviting.
DeleteAh, such nice twists in each of these, Alan. I look forward to playing with this form.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Karen. Enjoy some dodoitsu dabbling...
DeleteAlan, I always love reading your blogs because they offer such of variety of poetic goodness. Love is like a red rose...This poem's word choice makes it enjoyable to read.
ReplyDeleteThank you for your generous remarks, Carol, much appreciated. Such affirming remarks serve to make one continue to strive.
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