A Triversen poem has the following characteristics:
- Each stanza equals one sentence.
- Each sentence/stanza breaks into 3 lines (each line is a separate phrase in the sentence).
- There is a variable foot of 2-4 beats per line.
- The poem as a whole should add up to 18 lines (or 6 stanzas).
Here's my attempt at a Triversen poem. It sets a tone of sadness, but in this case that was my brief as a poet.
Earl's Funeral
when they buried old Earl
a murder of crows
sat in a nearby tree
the shadow of a cloud
passed over the mourners
who shuddered in the cold air
Earl was buried in an old suit
his favourite battered hat
and a photo of his dog.
can't remember
the last time I saw Earl
but we shared a few words
A life gets recounted
packed up
and then put away
the crows held the tree captive
then shook their sooty feathers
and flew towards the sun.
Alan j Wright
Beautiful poem.
ReplyDeleteThank you Kimberly. A few memories converged in the writing, not the least an image of an ancient cemetery I once visited in Ireland on a bleak afternoon. A one time sighting of an enormous gathering of crows in a tree. The other strong influence was an old fellow I knew as a boy growing up. The structure helped support the emergence of the words and make the poem from these various images. It's amazing sometimes what influences the writing and how it all fits.
DeleteYour poem has moved me to tears, Alan. The structure and images work together perfectly. I've never tried this form, but am now intrigued by it. Thank you for sharing.
ReplyDeleteThank you for your most positive response Catherine. I hope you are also moved to try a Triversen poem too.
DeleteYou and Diane with the crows this week! Those last two stanzas really pack a punch.
ReplyDeleteWhile crows bring a sense of foreboding, they are quite crafty birds who know how to survive. There are plenty of them in the near vicinity of my house and their raucous chorus is a curse on the tranquility of my mornings. Glad you found something in my words that you enjoyed Mary Lee.
DeleteWow, Alan, what a wonderful use of the form! I love the pathos of:A life gets recounted
ReplyDeletepacked up
and then put away
Thank you Sally. Your feedback is much appreciated.
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